A try out of mine. My version of translating WangFeng's Beijing Beijing to English

dv2011(小肥羊)

本文发表在 rolia.net 枫下论坛当我走在这里的每一条街道 every time I set my foot on each street here
我的心似乎从来都不能平静 my heart never stop burden
除了发动机的轰鸣和电气之音 output roaring of engines and ignore noise of electrics
我似乎听到了他烛骨般的心跳 I kind of hearing back his bone deep heart beats
我在这里欢笑 I had good time here
我在这里哭泣 I had bad time here
我在这里活着 I make a living here
也在这里死去 I will bury myself here
我在这里祈祷 I prey a lot here
我在这里迷惘 I confused many times here
我在这里寻找 I am seeking a lot here
在这里失去 I lost myself countless times here
北京北京 Toronto, my home
咖啡馆与广场有三个街区 three blocks away made distance between square and coffee shops
就像霓虹灯到月亮的距离 such distance has no difference between the moon to spot lights
人们在挣扎中互相告慰和拥抱 hugging, struggling and comforting, these people
寻找着追逐着奄奄一息的碎梦 where is that dying dream of being pieces, of mine
我们这里欢笑
我们这里哭泣
我们这里活着
也这里死去
我们这里祈祷
我们这里迷惘
我们这里寻找
也在这失去
北京北京

如果有一天我不得不离去 if I would have to spare myself away
我希望人们把我埋在这里 please set me free here
在这儿我能感觉到我的存在 here I can feel my own exist
在这有太多让我眷恋的东西 here plenty of things I miss so much
我在这里欢笑
我在这里哭泣
我在这里活着
也这里死去
我在这里祈祷
我在这里迷惘
我在这里寻找
也在这失去
北京北京更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net

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另外，俺受到教化，已经决定花粉涂墙了。以后此坛发言一律English， starting from this moment...LoL -dv2011(小肥羊); 2012-12-12 (#7950842@0)

A try out of mine. My version of translating WangFeng's Beijing Beijing to English -dv2011(小肥羊); 2012-12-13 {1428} (#7950923@0)
本文发表在 rolia.net 枫下论坛当我走在这里的每一条街道 every time I set my foot on each street here
我的心似乎从来都不能平静 my heart never stop burden
除了发动机的轰鸣和电气之音 output roaring of engines and ignore noise of electrics
我似乎听到了他烛骨般的心跳 I kind of hearing back his bone deep heart beats
我在这里欢笑 I had good time here
我在这里哭泣 I had bad time here
我在这里活着 I make a living here
也在这里死去 I will bury myself here
我在这里祈祷 I prey a lot here
我在这里迷惘 I confused many times here
我在这里寻找 I am seeking a lot here
在这里失去 I lost myself countless times here
北京北京 Toronto, my home
咖啡馆与广场有三个街区 three blocks away made distance between square and coffee shops
就像霓虹灯到月亮的距离 such distance has no difference between the moon to spot lights
人们在挣扎中互相告慰和拥抱 hugging, struggling and comforting, these people
寻找着追逐着奄奄一息的碎梦 where is that dying dream of being pieces, of mine
我们这里欢笑
我们这里哭泣
我们这里活着
也这里死去
我们这里祈祷
我们这里迷惘
我们这里寻找
也在这失去
北京北京

如果有一天我不得不离去 if I would have to spare myself away
我希望人们把我埋在这里 please set me free here
在这儿我能感觉到我的存在 here I can feel my own exist
在这有太多让我眷恋的东西 here plenty of things I miss so much
我在这里欢笑
我在这里哭泣
我在这里活着
也这里死去
我在这里祈祷
我在这里迷惘
我在这里寻找
也在这失去
北京北京更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net

some bricks for u -wincity(红卫兵); 2012-12-13 {1683} (#7950960@0)
本文发表在 rolia.net 枫下论坛当我走在这里的每一条街道 every time I set my foot on each street here（when, walk, every street)
我的心似乎从来都不能平静 my heart never stop burdens (burden 很不好）
除了发动机的轰鸣和电气之音 output roaring of engines and ignore noise of electric （out， ignore 莫名其妙）
我似乎听到了他烛骨般的心跳 hear back his bone deep heart beats （bone deep 不够好）
我在这里欢笑 I had good time here （why not laughing？）
我在这里哭泣 I had bad time here （why not crying？）
我在这里活着 I make a living here （why not live？ totally different from make a living）
也在这里死去 I will bury myself here （why not die？）
我在这里祈祷 I prey a lot here
我在这里迷惘 I lost many times here （lost 不够好）
我在这里寻找 I am seeking a lot here
在这里失去 I lost many times myself here
北京北京 Toronto, my home
咖啡馆与广场有三个街区 three blocks away made distance between square and coffee shop
就像霓虹灯到月亮的距离 distance such as from moon to spot lights （neon light，such as -》 like）
人们在挣扎中互相告慰和拥抱 hugging, struggling and comforting （struggling is not 1 of the 3）
寻找着追逐着奄奄一息的碎梦 where is that dying dream of being pieces （dream of being pieces 隔靴搔痒）
我们这里欢笑
我们这里哭泣
我们这里活着
也这里死去
我们这里祈祷
我们这里迷惘
我们这里寻找
也在这失去
北京北京

如果有一天我不得不离去 if I would have to spare myself away
我希望人们把我埋在这里 please set me free here （why not bury？）
在这儿我能感觉到我的存在 here I can feel my exist
在这有太多让我眷恋的东西 here plenty of things I miss so much
我在这里欢笑
我在这里哭泣
我在这里活着
也这里死去
我在这里祈祷
我在这里迷惘
我在这里寻找
也在这失去
北京北京更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net

Not to hurry, use my new version which was modified minute ago and do it again please please lol -dv2011(小肥羊); 2012-12-13 (#7950962@0)

还发现了不少几个 filler phrases，不光无用而且软化了原作：seeking （a lot here），lost （myself countless times here），confused （many times here），etc。 -wincity(红卫兵); 2012-12-13 (#7950970@0)

睡了 -tyra(Zara); 2012-12-13 (#7950971@0)

睡不着 -wincity(红卫兵); 2012-12-13 (#7950973@0)

confused 也很不到位 -wincity(红卫兵); 2012-12-13 (#7950972@0)

What about I use the word of being puzzled -dv2011(小肥羊); 2012-12-13 (#7950980@0)

it's actually "lost", puzzled and confused are about specific things, but 迷茫 is a state of the mind. there's probably a more powerful word than "lost". -wincity(红卫兵); 2012-12-13 (#7950983@0)

What I have been thinking previous is that what I should do if I was wangfeng himself. Should I translate this song words for words or put myself into his shoes? I think my version is a good example of how to use meaningful words to make it done -dv2011(小肥羊); 2012-12-13 (#7950977@0)

I agree with your approach, but your version failed to convey the spirit of the original, partly due to your choice of words. -wincity(红卫兵); 2012-12-13 (#7950981@0)

You do have a point here, I will leave it for now and hopefully I could find few better words tomorrow to beaf it up, hehe -dv2011(小肥羊); 2012-12-13 (#7950986@0)

肥哥，注意笔误啊。是 -thornthorn($oOHoly MolyOo$); 2012-12-13 {7} (#7951108@0)
beef up
I bet you wanted to find "A" few better words. Without "A", it means almost no words. -winterstorm(打酱油的); 2012-12-13 (#7951116@0)

Not necessarily. Few still means more than one but infinitely small in number. -thornthorn($oOHoly MolyOo$); 2012-12-13 (#7951128@0)

显然你只知其一，不过本人没太大兴趣码字教你。你自己去查查few和a few的区别和用法，再来理论。 -winterstorm(打酱油的); 2012-12-13 (#7951232@0)

还是当你自己的老师自娱自乐吧。你越是自傲自大，在我眼里就越是一文不值。Few and little both mean ‘almost none’. They have a negative meaning. 但 few 不是没有。就你这种态度，永远呆在你种所谓都是local的那地方学你的英语吧，基本上是死路一条。 -thornthorn($oOHoly MolyOo$); 2012-12-13 (#7951290@0)

Fat Lamb raised a few good points in the past few days. -howarddong(侯董); 2012-12-13 (#7951350@0)

He did indeed. No one here is perfect. This forum is not for the one that indulges himself in lecturing around. It is about learning from each other. -thornthorn($oOHoly MolyOo$); 2012-12-13 (#7951404@0)

This is a typical run on sentence. Pay more attention to punctuation. -howarddong(侯董); 2012-12-13 (#7951345@0)

肥哥，用 word by word 比较好。 -thornthorn($oOHoly MolyOo$); 2012-12-13 (#7951099@0)

俺亲自表扬了你。。。。没瞅见。。。。？ -tigar25(大忽悠之准备冬眠); 2012-12-12 (#7950931@0)

他这叫矫情 -tyra(Zara); 2012-12-13 (#7950948@0)

LOL, thank you both, I just made my translation completed, please give me your thoughts -dv2011(小肥羊); 2012-12-13 (#7950956@0)

一定要滴血成河才能修成正果. 继续努力吧! -thornthorn($oOHoly MolyOo$); 2012-12-13 (#7951015@0)

就是假冒酱油哥上音频被骂了脸皮那么厚不至于心在流血吧！可以理解为幽默吗！ -zhousx18(心想事成); 2012-12-13 (#7951718@0)

British humour? What do you know about British humour? It is not famous for forgiving or gentle. It is bloody and captive, much more than you can handle. You won't get its spirit of being self-effacing, to start with. Forget about it :-). -goingconern(GoingConcern); 2012-12-13 (#7951945@0)

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A try out of mine. My version of translating WangFeng's Beijing Beijing to English

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