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孩子有个作业昨天“忘了”让我签字,说是落在学校了。我让她今天拿回来。原来是篇作文,她让我签字,却不愿意让我看内容。我坚持的看到了,还是篇长的。这是其中的一小段。

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Animal Abuse is a big problem in our society today. Unfortunately, not much people care about it. But I do. Neglect and abandonment is the most common form of animal cruelty. And who causes this? HUMANS. Studies have shown that 64.5% of animal abuse involves dogs, 18% of it involves cat abuse, and 25% involves other animals. Animals are slaughtered just because people don't have any use for them. Is that right? Apparently, it is to some people. More than 15 million warm-blooded animals are used for research every year! And in the United States alone, 1.13 million animals are used in testing and research. I mean, sure, research is very important, and without it, life might not be life as it is today, but millions? Hopefully, in the future, scientists will find a way to do testing without taking away an animals life. Furthermore, I'm assuming that everyone has been to at least one store in there life that sells fox and mink coats, but what you don't know is that it takes 18 foxes just to make one fox coat, and 55 minks to make one mink coat.

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  • 工作学习 / 外语学习 / 孩子有个作业昨天“忘了”让我签字,说是落在学校了。我让她今天拿回来。原来是篇作文,她让我签字,却不愿意让我看内容。我坚持的看到了,还是篇长的。这是其中的一小段。
    本文发表在 rolia.net 枫下论坛......

    Animal Abuse is a big problem in our society today. Unfortunately, not much people care about it. But I do. Neglect and abandonment is the most common form of animal cruelty. And who causes this? HUMANS. Studies have shown that 64.5% of animal abuse involves dogs, 18% of it involves cat abuse, and 25% involves other animals. Animals are slaughtered just because people don't have any use for them. Is that right? Apparently, it is to some people. More than 15 million warm-blooded animals are used for research every year! And in the United States alone, 1.13 million animals are used in testing and research. I mean, sure, research is very important, and without it, life might not be life as it is today, but millions? Hopefully, in the future, scientists will find a way to do testing without taking away an animals life. Furthermore, I'm assuming that everyone has been to at least one store in there life that sells fox and mink coats, but what you don't know is that it takes 18 foxes just to make one fox coat, and 55 minks to make one mink coat.

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    • 真是"孩子"的作业? 也好,这下子大家就可以口无遮拦了,还不用担心说话深浅.
      • 骗你我变小狗
        • What a smart girl! Preteen, right?
          • She has a heart...at least..
            • Very smooth writing. Knowledge and skills can be developed later in life, a kind heart, priceless. It’s the source of respect.
        • no no no Chinese...en I mean, you know, just like, for example, im no good at English also
    • 应该是摘抄自某些杂志,其实只要看看超市里的肉食,就知道有多少动物在被无情的宰杀了。除非人类基因变为草食物种,否则这种讨论毫无意义。
      • 从通篇“语感”上看,这孩子的作文正处于中西过渡时期,希望引起家长的足够重视。
      • 可能从网上摘录的,有数据吗!
      • 吃肉也算 abuse?如果这样,那么世界上所有的生物都是 abuse 来 abuse 去的。
      • 这个意义在于"最大限度地减少不必要的杀戮"。得不了100分就索性交白卷得0分?
    • 孩子写得不错,数据雄厚,感情和说理层次都比较丰富。但是逻辑有点乱,论证开个很好的头,就不论下去了,又转其它论点,有点可惜。花朵多,果实少。关于如和build up 逻辑论证,力量层层增加,首尾干净利落,爸爸给强调一下。
      • 请求你给说所吧。爸爸lay back :-)